Dragonisms Part 2 - NSFW (Probably)

I'm continuing to fix the errors Dragon Naturally Speaking created in my novella. If you remember, I mentioned trying to read it into the computer as an experiment. It was a major fail and I sent my backlist novels to be scanned. I continue to persevere, though, on Kimi and Nic's story. I finally hit the love scene. Depending on where you work and how stringent the filter is on the net, this might have language NSFW.

Here's what Dragon did to my love scene:

Dragon: Shifting to her side, he returned to Kimi slips, delicately sucking on them.
Should Be: Shifting to her side, he returned to Kimi's lips, delicately sucking on them.

Dragon: As the rows does he was
Should Be: As aroused as he was

Dragon: It only took a moment before Kimi's Tom trailed over his lips.
Should Be: It only took a moment before Kimi's tongue trailed over his lips.

Dragon: He pushed her shirt up and Tracy last waste of her panties.
Should Be: He pushed her shirt up and traced the elastic waist of her panties.

Dragon: her nipples were talked a Nic grinned  (Talked? Really, Dragon? Her nipples were talked?)

Should Be: her nipples were taut and Nic grinned

Dragon: She gasped and urged her hips. (Come on, hips, you can do it! (urged. sigh.)

Should Be: She gasped and arched her hips.

Dragon: he moved a bit farther down in sync is tied into her.
Should Be: he moved a bit farther down and sank his tongue into her. (What does Dragon have against a little tongue action? That's the second time it balked.)

Dragon:  Kimi's long hair trailed off the side of the pillow onto the bed. He wanted to feel it falling across his body, to have her tease him with her tresses. Next time. He could wait.

"Next!" Kimi's voice was thick, her eyes heavy lid. (I don't write erotic romance. Kimi did not say "Next." Gah!)

Should Be: Kimi's long hair trailed off the side of the pillow onto the bed. He wanted to feel it falling across his body, to have her tease him with her tresses. Next time. He could wait.

"Nic!" Kimi's voice was thick, her eyes heavy-lidded.

Dragon: She sank her teeth into his biceps and neck was lost. (Wow, that's quite some bite she has. Maybe she's like a T-Rex?)

Should Be: She sank her teeth into his biceps and Nic was lost.

I think my personal favorite is when Dragon wanted Kimi to yell "Next!" Maybe Dragon is writing a different story than the one I wanted to transcribe.

Dragonisms, Part 1

Here are some of the more interesting turns of phrase that Dragon's speech recognition software came up with as I transcribed Dark Awakening. Some of this stuff is almost as good as Damn You Auto-Correct. Among my favorites:

• She even put spiders outside when she found them in her apartment instead of squishing them, and she wolves at those things.
  
  It's supposed to be: She even put spiders outside when she found them in her apartment instead of squishing them, and she loathed those things.
  
  
• Kimi realized Mika and Nic were headed for the door, and that should occur out of her paralysis.
  
  It's supposed to be: Kimi realized Mika and Nic were headed for the door, and that shook her out of her paralysis.
  
  
• how much time had passed balls she'd been filing
  
  It's supposed to be: how much time had passed while she'd been filing
  
  
• when someone stepped out of the goodness
  
  It supposed to be: when someone stepped out of the dimness
  
  
• The man's voice was a rich baritone, animated and some pleasant, even attractive, they raise goose bumps on Kimi's arms and she backed up a step.
  
  It's supposed to be: The man's voice was a rich baritone, and it made him sound pleasant, even attractive, but it raised goose bumps on Kimi's arms and she backed up a step.
  
  
• Calling it forward, she surrounded herself, leading ticketing and roll until it would be impenetrable.
  
  It's supposed to be: Calling it forward, she surrounded herself, letting it thicken and grow until it would be impenetrable.
  
  
• As she ate a bag out of her desk for, she realized she needed help.
  
  It's supposed to be: As she yanked the bag out of her desk drawer, she realized she needed help.

The last one is my personal favorite. :-)